Better, but still kind of hard to figure out. For example, around 0:33 (turn 2?) as you exit the turn, you start to drift out, like you're going to go to the left of that shiny patch of asphalt, then suddenly your line changes. I can't tell if it is just from the camera bouncing around, or what. The jostling of the camera also makes it tough for me to get a good sense of the lines through the turns. I don't have a ton of experience, so maybe others will be able to tell more from this video. Some of the turns look smooth. Some don't, but I can't tell how much of that is the camera.
More laps, with a steady camera, and that view, would be great. I generally watch to see if people are consistent with their laps, and watch for any mid-turn corrections. I'm definitely no instructor.
Because... Grocery Getter.